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Sunday, 17 February 2013

Lost rally car

Have you seen
Number sixteen
Last checked in
At point nineteen

Never made twenty
Had petrol plenty
No one's seen
Number sixteen

                            I saw a car
                            From afar
                            Up that hill
                            Could it be there still?

                            Near a home
                            All alone
                            Looked abandoned
                            Near the oakland

            Yes, I saw them
            Going round the bend
            Looked pretty lost
            With shattered exhaust

            Making a mess
            I confess
            I thought they'd given up
            It'll need a massive clean up

Xxxxxx

Poem inspired by the picture " Wind of History by Jacek Yerka" provided by The Mag.

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17 comments:

  1. Anonymous17 February 2013 at 16:38

    Cheers!

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  2. Laurie Kolp17 February 2013 at 17:31

    More, more!

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    1. LLM Calling17 February 2013 at 17:35

      I know, it's definitely not finished but.I'm not sure where it's going next :)

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  3. Gail17 February 2013 at 17:32

    Interesting

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  4. Yvonne Osborne17 February 2013 at 17:58

    First prize for a unique take. Car Number 16...in some strange way, giving it a number gives this car and the people inside place and personality, kinda like that Stephen King novel.

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  5. Kathe W.17 February 2013 at 20:24

    love how you took this down a road we others had not seen!

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  6. Tess Kincaid17 February 2013 at 22:02

    This one's so lyrical...set it to music!

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  7. Michael18 February 2013 at 01:00

    so creative. a rally car. haha well done

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  8. kaykuala18 February 2013 at 01:13

    Beautiful write, Emma! The word craft is classic supported with lots of imagery! Nicely!

    Hank

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  9. Bo18 February 2013 at 02:44

    I really enjoyed this.

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  10. Sueann18 February 2013 at 10:30

    This was fun to read...like Tess said...lyrical!
    Hugs
    SueAnn

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  11. Berowne18 February 2013 at 12:34

    Gives solid meaning to the word "imaginative."

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  12. Helen18 February 2013 at 17:15

    Your Mag is so full of energy, I'm getting dizzy! Nice :-)

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  13. Margaret18 February 2013 at 18:53

    ...a bit of mystery, what ever happened to car 16?

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  14. Susan Anderson18 February 2013 at 20:06

    Super cool rhythm and rhyme!

    =)

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  15. Susie Clevenger18 February 2013 at 21:40

    I'm with Laurie, more! love it!!

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  16. 21 Wits20 February 2013 at 00:32

    Yes! I do believe I saw it- but can't be to sure on the number! hehehehe!

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