I can't pass on a challenge, when it comes to poetry especially. But this one is mega hard. We're challenged to complete a Basho haiku from the early seventeenth century.
missing a wife
the bamboo grass dives under
.........
I tried:
missing a wife
the bamboo grass dives under
trouble and strife
But it was too flippant.
I tried:
missing a wife
the bamboo grass dives under
giving up on life
But that was a little depressing.
I tried:
missing a wife
the bamboo grass dives under
cutting like a knife
At which point I admitted defeat. At least I tried Hey? As did others at carpe diem
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Emma ... what a struggle ... I am proud to see how you've taken up this tough challenge. I think that the third attempt is the most appreciated completion ... Basho would be proud as you have to be on this challenge ... well done.
ReplyDeleteI don't think you were defeated.
ReplyDeleteEach of these makes sense in a way that the starting fragment did not.
Cheers!
JzN
Ah - a typo.
ReplyDeleteI'm JzB not whatever that last signoff said.
Emma, they all make sense to me. The prompt was not easy. Well done!
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