tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7622820281827881345.post5343983759610270421..comments2024-01-02T10:13:02.894+00:00Comments on LLM Calling: Dance if you can #NaPoWriMoDayTwentyLLM Callinghttp://www.blogger.com/profile/17199375981896229914noreply@blogger.comBlogger16125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7622820281827881345.post-22645967959253714372013-04-21T13:00:33.489+01:002013-04-21T13:00:33.489+01:00A merry dance, indeed. :)A merry dance, indeed. :)Cadhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16184350413033668517noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7622820281827881345.post-73163409032048709272013-04-21T09:41:31.713+01:002013-04-21T09:41:31.713+01:00A fun poem to dance to as well!A fun poem to dance to as well!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13318991328136593536noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7622820281827881345.post-13092388320556832102013-04-21T04:32:46.954+01:002013-04-21T04:32:46.954+01:00Nicely done, catching them in the dance. Reminds ...Nicely done, catching them in the dance. Reminds me of jewelry box ballerinas and "Red Shoes" and a bit of Buffy Ste Marie's "Horse on a Carousel." Susanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05723639294340760325noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7622820281827881345.post-75925251064798521152013-04-21T04:19:18.664+01:002013-04-21T04:19:18.664+01:00I like the second stanza.I like the second stanza.aquadragonfruithttp://returnforrefund.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7622820281827881345.post-65444841268982706722013-04-21T02:08:05.070+01:002013-04-21T02:08:05.070+01:00Your repetition works so well with the theme of yo...Your repetition works so well with the theme of your poem. Nicely done!Lolamousehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12508347229501155001noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7622820281827881345.post-4696801581426017392013-04-20T23:36:49.978+01:002013-04-20T23:36:49.978+01:00Oh a woman's lot. We dance and twirl to the mu...Oh a woman's lot. We dance and twirl to the music of a man to be forbidden our freedom...Susie Clevengerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09239990133754328967noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7622820281827881345.post-59610523179156739012013-04-20T23:20:45.704+01:002013-04-20T23:20:45.704+01:00Your poem reminds me of an old saying "dance ...Your poem reminds me of an old saying "dance or pay the piper". I, too, love the rhythm of it and the observation.Elleceehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07049386448865741626noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7622820281827881345.post-6963838128116770322013-04-20T22:48:46.072+01:002013-04-20T22:48:46.072+01:00Beautifully sad.Beautifully sad.Gailhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04219479223227928561noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7622820281827881345.post-70245112729818342012013-04-20T22:23:14.903+01:002013-04-20T22:23:14.903+01:00Emma, thanks for stopping by my blog, too, and for...Emma, thanks for stopping by my blog, too, and for addressing my question. I agree - the issue is the whole world, and I tend to comment only on the narrative at hand. Glad I saw this deeply into your poem, which needs to be viewed more widely.Sharp Little Pencilhttp://sharplittlepencil.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7622820281827881345.post-82116706036979377992013-04-20T22:01:43.011+01:002013-04-20T22:01:43.011+01:00exactly Kay, and yet in our perceived freedom I do...exactly Kay, and yet in our perceived freedom I don't think we really are whilst we follow the call of greed and worth to stay on the treadmillLLM Callinghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17199375981896229914noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7622820281827881345.post-54454928857384373962013-04-20T21:59:42.544+01:002013-04-20T21:59:42.544+01:00I was thinking about all of humanity in our greed ...I was thinking about all of humanity in our greed ridden world, women, men and everyone. so yes, you've got the enslaved right but the issue is bigger :)LLM Callinghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17199375981896229914noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7622820281827881345.post-42866663383657288952013-04-20T21:15:29.195+01:002013-04-20T21:15:29.195+01:00The flow of the poem is lovely... but this also fe...The flow of the poem is lovely... but this also felt like a commentary on women's lot throughout the ages. At first, it's all "Dance, dance, twirl..." and then it morphs from observation of their movements... to the fact that they are enslaved.<br /><br />This hit me in my protofeminist heart, and I wonder whether that was part of your process? Pls. let me know if you visit my blog, OK? Thanks, AmySharp Little Pencilhttp://sharplittlepencil.com/2013/04/20/slowly-slowly-ekphrastic-poem/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7622820281827881345.post-6710997382880441802013-04-20T19:55:41.134+01:002013-04-20T19:55:41.134+01:00I like the dance rhythm of your poem, too, but the...I like the dance rhythm of your poem, too, but the last line left me sad...when I was young I didn't like the totalitarian power of kings and queens in fairy tales, either, and some part of me still can't get past it.<br />KKay L. Davieshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09966266404058177742noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7622820281827881345.post-77372433059316339162013-04-20T19:40:51.602+01:002013-04-20T19:40:51.602+01:00Yes! The rhythm here is unmistakable! Very nice ...Yes! The rhythm here is unmistakable! Very nice ........... Helenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16619199535376925989noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7622820281827881345.post-31833035281796790972013-04-20T14:28:59.280+01:002013-04-20T14:28:59.280+01:00There is a rhythm to your words that fits nicely w...There is a rhythm to your words that fits nicely with the theme. Nice write!Charleenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07983825702353264957noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7622820281827881345.post-90675556842536318162013-04-20T13:26:02.707+01:002013-04-20T13:26:02.707+01:00Your use of repetition - both sound and word - enh...Your use of repetition - both sound and word - enhances the rhythm of the dance.Kerry O'Connorhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00720862912375945249noreply@blogger.com