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Wednesday, 19 December 2012

Wondering what's out of sight

It's the longest day, nearly
And we're walking around, early
Exploring the ordinary, which isn't

Because, in the dark
Everything looks stark
And shadows look ever so creepy

But lights create pictures
They light the particulars
Of life that would otherwise by hidden

So we walk, by the light
Wondering what's out of sight
And hoping no monster's out with us

Xxxxx

This poem was developing in my mind since we were walking in Brighton at the weekend, but it finally took form when I read the prompt at poetry jam to quote about a walk.  I hope you enjoy.

12 comments:

  1. Really liked this especially:
    "But lights create pictures
    They light the particulars
    Of life that would otherwise by hidden"
    There's a nice rhythm to that and it's true we all need the light to shine on the dark places. Glad to have found your blog,
    David

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  2. everything looks different in the dark, but def walking with the light makes life a bit better....smiles...its rather peaceful to walk at night as well...

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  3. Yes indeed...in the dark everything does look stark. I was coming home yesterday about 4 p.m. and was amazed that it was almost dark. I will be glad when things are going the other way again and my world is brightening a bit more day after day.

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  4. If that is Brighton, England, it's where I was born and grew up.
    Everything does look s different at night, ominous in some ways too but, not so bad if we are with someone.
    Lovely poem.

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  5. Love the chuga-chuga rhythm of your poem!!!

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  6. Love all the different walks people have taken with this prompt. So much of the day there in England (I assume Brighton, England) is dark this time of year it is neat you incorporated shadows and darkness in this.

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  7. Emma, I loved this! Light is so interesting and dark, you just never know--love how you brought the humor in at the end :-)

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  8. Enjoyed... in darkness imagination works pretty cool ... so it is good to hope no monsters are with us.:-)

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  9. I can see why you would want to walk by the light! Enjoyed your poem!

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  10. "Exploring the ordinary, which isn't"...I like that! oh yes, the mind can play tricks in the dark...

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  11. i like the rhythm created with your rhyme scheme. great take on the prompt!

    thanks for participating at Poetry Jam!


    dani

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  12. I enjoyed this exploration of the "ordinary which isn't" --- really nicely done. Unique use of darkness in yur imagery.

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