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Saturday, 2 February 2013

Squirrel cinquain

Squirrel
Patiently waits
Spies a nut and pounces
Takes it high, breaks it open and
Eats it

Squirrel
Following you
It knows what you have got
What's in your pocket hid away
Wants it

Squirrel
Hiding in tree
Waiting for someone to
Let their secret stash of nuts free
Watching

Squirrel
Happy to pose
But only on their right
Take their photograph, just say nuts
Squirrel

Squirrel
Following you
Waiting for someone to
Take their photograph, just say nuts
Squirrel

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Linked up at real toads where we were challenged to write a cinquain - another oriental style of poetry with the syllabic count 2-4-6-8-2.  I've taken it the further step to become a GARLAND cinquain: a sequence of six cinquains in which the final cinquain is composed of lines from the preceding five (generally L1 from S1, L2 from S2, L3 from S3, etc...) 

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21 comments:

  1. Marian2 February 2013 at 19:12

    oh! so fun, i love this! though i think the syllable count for "squirrel" depends on where you live :)
    i'm impressed that you took on the garland cinquain. i bet you're one of those people who likes to write things like villanelles and sestinas. (i'm not one of those people, heh.)

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    1. LLM Calling3 February 2013 at 12:02

      that sounds like some new forms for me to try, I love order and rhythm, I'm off to try some

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  2. GoddessChhavi2 February 2013 at 19:46

    Eeee it is so cute! I'm glad you had great time taking squirrel pictures! :D

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    1. LLM Calling3 February 2013 at 12:02

      it was a lot of fun, I've never seen so many squirrels and all so tame

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  3. Susan2 February 2013 at 19:55

    Clever! SO smooth that I nearly missed it was a garland.

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  4. Jennifer Wagner2 February 2013 at 20:03

    Nicely done Emma! Really flows well and fun to read too :-)

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  5. Janine Bollée2 February 2013 at 20:54

    Your metre is superb, especially in the first fiver.

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    1. LLM Calling3 February 2013 at 12:04

      thanks, I love the first stanza as well and was tempted to leave it there but had too much else to say :)

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  6. Lolamouse2 February 2013 at 22:23

    These capture the spirit of mischievous squirrels so well! Great job!

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  7. Kateri3 February 2013 at 01:45

    Okay, I want that vine tangled stump! Impressed by the flow of this.

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    1. LLM Calling3 February 2013 at 12:05

      me too, isn't it amazing, it was huge as well, about 10 foot tall

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  8. Helen3 February 2013 at 02:39

    I had a difficult with ONE cinquain ... you did this and made it seem effortless.

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  9. Kathy Reed3 February 2013 at 06:14

    ..felt like I was following him everywhere..nicely done ;)

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  10. Laura3 February 2013 at 15:03

    squirrels... such posers:-)

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  11. Ella3 February 2013 at 17:45

    YOU are clever! This was fun to read~
    Great form

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  12. Susie Clevenger3 February 2013 at 20:06

    Love the vined stump..It has a poem written all over it. You cinquain is delightfully clever and to take on the longer form...bravo!

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  13. Sharp Little Pencil5 February 2013 at 04:18

    Someone mentioned the syllable count of "squirrel," and I got that... one of the things I HATE about forms. Me, I'm a "Squirl" person.

    Having disparaged the form, I did attempt it. But you know what I thought of when the squirrel was trying to get at your pockets? Gollum in Lord of the Rings, "It's the precious... and we wants it!" Wow, a fuse blew in my brain, huh? Thanks, this was great.

    Amy http://sharplittlepencil.com/2013/02/04/cinquains-for-real-toads/

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