Monday, 21 October 2013

Missing a wife make the haiku complete

I can't pass on a challenge, when it comes to poetry especially. But this one is mega hard.  We're challenged to complete a Basho haiku from the early seventeenth century.

missing a wife
the bamboo grass dives under
.........

I tried:

missing a wife
the bamboo grass dives under
trouble and strife

But it was too flippant.
I tried:

missing a wife
the bamboo grass dives under
giving up on life

But that was a little depressing.
I tried:

missing a wife
the bamboo grass dives under
cutting like a knife

At which point I admitted defeat.  At least I tried Hey? As did others at  carpe diem 


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4 comments:

Kristjaan Panneman said...

Emma ... what a struggle ... I am proud to see how you've taken up this tough challenge. I think that the third attempt is the most appreciated completion ... Basho would be proud as you have to be on this challenge ... well done.

Jazzbumpa said...

I don't think you were defeated.

Each of these makes sense in a way that the starting fragment did not.

Cheers!
JzN

Jazzbumpa said...

Ah - a typo.

I'm JzB not whatever that last signoff said.

Reading Pleasure said...

Emma, they all make sense to me. The prompt was not easy. Well done!