Friday, 19 April 2013

Melting #NaPoWriMoDayNineteen

I'm melting
(Not smelting)
Disappearing
(Not creating)

Like chocolate
(I'm running)
Like mallow
(I'm oozing)

I'm solidified
(Outside)
Running away
(Inside)

Like toffee
(I'm crunchy)
On the edge
(I'm brittle)

I'm melting
(Not smelting)
Disappearing
(Not creating)

Xxxx

Linked up at real toads where we were challenged to write about melting without mentioning temperature.  This is my take, I hope it speaks to you.

10 comments:

Kay L. Davies said...

I love the repetition at the end, but my favorite stanza is
"I'm solidified
(Outside)
Running away
(Inside)"
I can really relate to that, Emma.
K

Peggy said...

Good take on prompt. I too went with the idea of myself melting.

Charleen said...

This is a poem to make you smile, and a little hungry for chocolate and candy!

Susie Clevenger said...

So creative. I agree with Kay..that is my favorite stanza also.

Robyn Greenhouse said...

The chocolate did speak to me - now I want some!!

Helen said...

Honestly ... you are one clever woman!!

Loredana Donovan said...

The repetition works well. I like how you created your own poetry form.

Sherry Blue Sky said...

OMG. The photo at the bottom of your poem about did me in. CRAVINGS!!!!!!

Sharp Little Pencil said...

The "crunchy" toffee comment reminds me of how I describe some gruff people: "Crunchy on the outside, but with a creamy center." You know the folks I'm talking about! Nicely done, one of the best of the bunch. Amy

Isadora Gruye said...

I like how you used the idea of melting and sugary things. This piece has more layers than that, however, as if the lines in brackets are a necessary counterpoint. Well done and viva la