Sunday, 14 April 2013

Curled up #NaPoWriMoDayFourteen

Curled up
Entirely perfect
My baby

My baby
Love Generator
Reliant

Reliant
Instincts confused
Such fear

Such fear
Will mistakes repeat?
Have faith

Have faith
Trust, learn, ask, love
Fear not

Fear not
Baby of mine
Curled up

Xxxxx

Today at real toads we were challenged to write an ekphrasis to one of the paintings of Spanish Impressionist Joaquin Sorolla.  I chose the one below.

12 comments:

aprille said...

This is as pure a lullaby as I have ever heard sing.
Perfect.

hedgewitch said...

I like the way this builds from the end line words, almost like a cascade poem--and you capture the serenity mixed with uncertainty that is at the heart of mothering, as well as the contemplative mood of the picture. Thanks for participating.

Magical Mystical Teacher said...

"Fear not" has biblical echoes about it, a phrase that appears over and over again when God confronts humans.

A Dozen Whirls

Ellecee said...

I love this cascading form. You express a new Mother's fears so well,,,and the thoughts that come full circle,,back to the sweetness in her arms.

Susie Clevenger said...

Love the flow from end words into beginning words. Such a lovely lullaby.

Peggy said...

Hope and caring in this poem, just like I see in the picture. Well done form poem.

Kay L. Davies said...

Perfect, Emma, as a newborn is perfect.
K

Ella said...

Oh, this is gently and sweet :D
I agree like a lullaby~

Jinksy said...

Lovely ending...

Helen said...

A difficult form, you managed it beautifully!!!

Loredana Donovan said...

A lovely cascade poem :)

Margaret said...

"My baby"...

NO sweeter words than that. Sigh.