Squirrel
Patiently waits
Spies a nut and pounces
Takes it high, breaks it open and
Eats it
Squirrel
Following you
It knows what you have got
What's in your pocket hid away
Wants it
Squirrel
Hiding in tree
Waiting for someone to
Let their secret stash of nuts free
Watching
Squirrel
Happy to pose
But only on their right
Take their photograph, just say nuts
Squirrel
Squirrel
Following you
Waiting for someone to
Take their photograph, just say nuts
Squirrel
Xxxxxx
Linked up at real toads where we were challenged to write a cinquain - another oriental style of poetry with the syllabic count 2-4-6-8-2. I've taken it the further step to become a GARLAND cinquain: a sequence of six cinquains in which the final cinquain is composed of lines from the preceding five (generally L1 from S1, L2 from S2, L3 from S3, etc...)
21 comments:
oh! so fun, i love this! though i think the syllable count for "squirrel" depends on where you live :)
i'm impressed that you took on the garland cinquain. i bet you're one of those people who likes to write things like villanelles and sestinas. (i'm not one of those people, heh.)
Eeee it is so cute! I'm glad you had great time taking squirrel pictures! :D
Clever! SO smooth that I nearly missed it was a garland.
Nicely done Emma! Really flows well and fun to read too :-)
Your metre is superb, especially in the first fiver.
These capture the spirit of mischievous squirrels so well! Great job!
Okay, I want that vine tangled stump! Impressed by the flow of this.
I had a difficult with ONE cinquain ... you did this and made it seem effortless.
..felt like I was following him everywhere..nicely done ;)
that sounds like some new forms for me to try, I love order and rhythm, I'm off to try some
it was a lot of fun, I've never seen so many squirrels and all so tame
thanks Susan
thanks, it was a lot of fun to write
thanks, I love the first stanza as well and was tempted to leave it there but had too much else to say :)
me too, isn't it amazing, it was huge as well, about 10 foot tall
squirrels are easy to write about :)
funny, I thought he was following me :)
squirrels... such posers:-)
YOU are clever! This was fun to read~
Great form
Love the vined stump..It has a poem written all over it. You cinquain is delightfully clever and to take on the longer form...bravo!
Someone mentioned the syllable count of "squirrel," and I got that... one of the things I HATE about forms. Me, I'm a "Squirl" person.
Having disparaged the form, I did attempt it. But you know what I thought of when the squirrel was trying to get at your pockets? Gollum in Lord of the Rings, "It's the precious... and we wants it!" Wow, a fuse blew in my brain, huh? Thanks, this was great.
Amy http://sharplittlepencil.com/2013/02/04/cinquains-for-real-toads/
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